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i read every word and am highly impressed.
dont really have anything to say beyond that
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I read through it trying to think of corrections or something to spiff it up but it's great. I couldn't come up with anything.

Well written and with all the field experience you have I don't know how they can turn you down. Oh and I liked how you tied the introduction into the conclusion.
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Thanks guys, I emailed a few of my prior professors and had them look at it as well. They offered some minor changes and once edited I'll put the new copy up.
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I love how you slipped in the fact you've done drugs :) haha

Otherwise, very well written and...all that, and I'm sure they'll accept you in with no doubt in their minds!
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wgToonces wrote:I love how you slipped in the fact you've done drugs :) haha

Otherwise, very well written and...all that, and I'm sure they'll accept you in with no doubt in their minds!
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My professor said the exact same thing. She told me that I should probably remove that statement even though I would probably end up working with someone who has experimented before as well. Honestly though when I was writing it I didn't even realize that what I wrote came off as a subtle intention of what I had done before. It just kind of slipped into the paper.
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professionally constructed, mate, and i can't see how the academic ummm...people, can't see that as ticking all the boxes and resulting in a WE WANT YOU response. As for your 84 hour work weeks, that seems like sadism...even understanding you are a man with a dream, you are making some huge sacrifices, in terms of living opportunities...why not take two years off, save for one, then travel the world with the next, still setting aside enough for grad school???balance out the strife with some play and exposure to more than books...either way, you know i wish you well, and will undoubtedly be bothered by the absence of your often lengthy and always welcome abrasive debating tendencies! in boca al lupo, amico...

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just be ready for the drug test ;)
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